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Wednesday, February 24, 2021

Cheddar Cheese and Chocolate Cake.

This is what i am.....

 I am crazy about sweet tasty chocolate.

I am addicted to hot sunny holidays.

I never tire from hard work school.

I can eat a whole bowl of crispy chicken teriyaki.

I wear comfy and soft clothes (sometimes).

I love to draw amazing art.

I like to play a sporty challenging game called tapuwae.

What should i improve next time?

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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousApril 7, 2021 at 1:38 PM

    Hi kaylynn, First I really like this poem! The rythm is great!
    I think you could add commas for if you use more than one adjective.
    Other than that I LOVE it!
    -Neave

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